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hi. i'm a newcomer. 2 of my friends and i are trying to make a visual novel just for fun, and i'm the designated drawer (sadly) and i suck, so i'm just practising drawing. i came here to get some feedback of what is a rough copy of what may be our prologue. (honestly, no offense, but i want to see how badly i can get burned, haha) i'd appreciate some good criticism
by the way, the guys is the main character, so he has no eyes (like most visual novels) and it's supposed to be in black and white so there's no sense of time or place. it's just a mysterious opening that's supposed to 'intrigue' the gamer
Try the "Art" boardThis is for oekaki
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